Heyyy plz tell me wat u think of tis poem i just wrote!?

Question: Heyyy plz tell me wat u think of tis poem i just wrote!!?

I love thee in so many ways
I’ll love thee ‘til the end of days

Without thee I art just bones and skin
A dead soul buried within

I art surely for thee
As thou art surely for me

My heart is filled with eternal love for thee
As deep and as bottomless as the timeless seaWww@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

Try modifying it!.!. give it more life!.!.!. its about ur love!.!. express it!.!. give ur thoughts wings!!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

try to keep the same measure of the lyrics and use more metaphors!. the main idea is interesting
I liked more the way you wrote the other poem you sent todayWww@QuestionHome@Com

It's okay!. Try changing the arts and thees up a little bit!. I understand on the ends to make it rhyme, but in the middle of a phrase use a different word!. But I like the overall flow of the poem!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

a bit bland

mix it up a bit, use metaphors that youre subject, and only your subject would understand!.

but its alrightWww@QuestionHome@Com

it's okay but you repeated thee too many times!. try using different wordsWww@QuestionHome@Com

It okayWww@QuestionHome@Com

it's alright!.!.!.!. an old school syle peom (thee)!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com