Mighty Hunter
by Cynthia S!.
Innocently,
carnivorously,
ever, oh, so Gracefully
she stalks the gecko
stalking the bug!.
Wait patiently,
pounce suddenly,
ever, oh, so sheepishly
Find gecko’s tail
Stuck between her teeth!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
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by Cynthia S!. Innocently, carnivorously, ever, oh, so Gracefully she stalks the gecko stalking the bug!. Wait patiently, pounce suddenly, ever, oh, so sheepishly Find gecko’s tail Stuck between her teeth!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Playtime for Grace Lizard licking on my mind Out into the garden What will I find!? A simple slippery serpent Most certainly what I craves A tail with wagging torso Love to watch how it behaves Meow and how, I catch release I'll not give this Squirmy plaything peace Look here Mum I got it Muffle mumble shake and toss It's ok he's on the food chain Please please Mum don't you get cross I'm happy in the garden This gecko gives me joy It's not a living breathing thing It's just MY little toy!!! (<- insert evil cat laugh here - moewuhahahhmuahahaha)Www@QuestionHome@Com I understand this poem is about a lizard hunter, (of some sort!?) but the metering and footing is all off, and almost unconsidered!. The mixture of dirt, lizard, taste of, and the blood I was imagining, mixed with one of the worst poems I have ever read; seriously, almost made me vomit!. And I am a guy who think lizards are intriguing!. I can only imagine what a woman with a weak gag reflex reactions would be if she read this!.Www@QuestionHome@Com I LOVE IT!!! #1 I'm sucha animal fan so I give you a 5 star rating!!! I love it the way you sound like you're stalking and hunting the prey! If animals were to read it they would love to see themeselves on a poem like yours!!! =]Www@QuestionHome@Com Grace, the mighty huntress!. Very visual!. Fun to read!.Www@QuestionHome@Com It's neat that you actually have geckos!. The only ones - I see - are on TV!. Too bad they really do not have insurance!. With the cats - tail coverage (at least) should be offered!. ?Www@QuestionHome@Com I can just picture a mass of tailless geckos - lol!. She's quite the huntress!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Cats are fun to watch in their jungle, A nice read!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Very nice free verse in my mind!. You could try without the "oh" in both stanzas for flow!. Was it Geoge or Grace!?Www@QuestionHome@Com Not too shabby!.Www@QuestionHome@Com |