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Position:Home>Poetry> What do you tihnk of my poem?Question: What do you tihnk of my poem!? flying down the path, wind in my hair
All worries lifted from my heart!. Passing people as I go, each one a blur!. Not slowing down, I need to be here, get there!. I glance to the side, see a withering rose If only I could stop, take a whiff But life is calling!. *tell me what you think, what pops into your head, tell me well anything! thank youWww@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Actually this is quite good!. It conveys a sense of urgency which is usually associated with the young!. No time to stop and smell the roses now because there are more compelling aspects to life!. When I was young and throughout college, I had no worries even though I'm sure I thought I did at the time!. also, at this time, friends and people are a blur!.!.!.they come and go at rapid pace!. It's not until much later that people begin to realize how important it is to slow down and stop to smell the roses because life really does fly!. Anyhow, this is what I get from it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com If you do not have the inclination to stop and smell a rose, are you sure all the worries are lifted from your heart!? Consider giving your rose a more attractive description!. Again if your rose is withering perhaps something your "real self" bothering - to put it a bit poetically!. And if all the people you're passing are blurry, ask yourself why!? !. Do you get my drift!? There is some kind of conflict between the ideas expressed in this poem!.Www@QuestionHome@Com you are good but the subject is clishe! "wind in my hair" or "life is calling" they are really usual and common try to write about something new to show your creativity!.Www@QuestionHome@Com The first part is like a perfect dream then its still a dream but as we go bye the rose its like a more detrimind dream then the begining gives away its a good poemWww@QuestionHome@Com I like it, especially the image of "not stopping to smell the roses!." Keep working on it!. I think you're going to be great!Www@QuestionHome@Com I LOVE IT!!!! That poem is perfect for people who want all they're worries away!.!.!.!. Yes we could all say that it's almost my life!.!.!.!. Such a deep meaning in which you could explain but only in your heart!!!! =]Www@QuestionHome@Com im thinking of suicide why !.!.idkWww@QuestionHome@Com |