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Question: What do you think of my poem!? Wrote it when I was 15!.!?
I wrote this when I was 15 while in high school watching student pass me at lunch!. Does it make sense!? What do you think!? What do you think it means!?
Disarm us of our humble eyes
And let us all be over-wise
In taking on a brand new role
Ceasing knowing of the toll
Our condescending eyes arise
To what we think are modest cries
But what we think is more than vile
We've strolled an inch, they ran a mile
But what a cloak of skin does cause
Is the knowing of each and every flaw
It's simple to judge another grin
But not to see what lies withinWww@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
wow I really really like it, I wrote something like this before its called "A table over" and I used a line like yours "It's simple to judge another grin
But not to see what lies within"
but mine was like this "She looks about the room with eyes so distant and dull, but with in I can hear her silent cries that do reach out in a helpless call"
I like the last part of the poem the very best
"But what a cloak of skin does cause
Is the knowing of each and every flaw
It's simple to judge another grin
But not to see what lies within"
10/10!!Www@QuestionHome@Com
Like I've told the others who have written rhyming poetry !. !. !. it's CRAP! Get this through your head !. !. !. not all poetry has to rhyme!. I'm a HARSH critic of poetry!.
By the way April, what is your last name!? My aviator has my last initial, which is also the letter D!. What are the chances we have the same last name!?
Oh, yeah !. !. !. STOP rhyming!Www@QuestionHome@Com
Wow!!Awesomeness!!You're very perceptive!.!.!.and!.!.yes!.!.your poem makes perfect sense!.!.!.!.It(to me)means people are judged by their "outside" appearance when they should be judged on their humanity,sympathy,kindness,honesty,etc!.!.!.!.!.
And you are right! :) :)Www@QuestionHome@Com
Amazing and true
You are a wonderful poet
Keep it up!Www@QuestionHome@Com