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Question: Feedback please!.!.!.!.!.!?
i wrote this poem for a guy im seeing!. i usually dont write poems, but im kinda inspired!. i just wasnt to kno what u guys think about it!. any suggestions!?!?!? changes!?!?!? add ons!?!?!? thanks for your time!.
you've brightened up my life
and you've been a wonderful friend
but now i have to let it go
this friendship has to end
my heart and feelings are involved
i just cant hold it back
the road i'm on that once was dark
is no longer black
you stole my heart, it's all yours
and thats completely true
i have to be honest, i have to say it
******* i've fallen in love with you!.
the stars are his name and this is about me wanting to move further than just a friendship, thats why i said it has to end!. its not about me not wanting him in my life!. thanksWww@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
hey im really sorry if i kind of completely changed it!. just offering some suggestions!. i think yours is really good!. xD
You’ve brightened up my life
and you've been a wonderful friend
But now I have to let that go
and move on to the next tread
Out of the forest and into the sun
who’s warm smile reminds me of you
You stole my heart, it’s all yours
That has always been true
You are my sun, I want to be yours
I’m ready to take the chance
I have to be honest, I have to say
****** I’ve fallen in love with youWww@QuestionHome@Com
That's cool!. As a guy, I would've thought that it was a poem to end the friendship, but at the end, it changes!. I would like it if my girl made me a poem like that!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
i liked the way u expressed ur feelings through the poem!.i'm
really inspired by ur love 2 the person u r wanting in life!.try 2
make such poems more with much more feelings!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Really Good poem
- NaudiaaWww@QuestionHome@Com
i wouldnt say your friendship is ending but getting stronger or evolving, good poem :)Www@QuestionHome@Com
Er!. It's!.!. good!.
For uh!. Giving him!.Www@QuestionHome@Com