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Question: Please give me feedback on this poem!.!.!.!?
i wrote this poem for a guy im seeing!. i usually dont write poems, but im kinda inspired!. i just wasnt to kno what u guys think about it!. any suggestions!?!?!? changes!?!?!? add ons!?!?!? thanks for your time!.
you've brightened up my life
and you've been a wonderful friend
but now i have to let it go
this friendship has to end
my heart and feelings are involved
i just cant hold it back
the road i'm on that once was dark
is no longer black
you stole my heart, it's all yours
and thats completely true
i have be honest, i have to say it
******* i've fallen in love with you!.
(the stars are his name)Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
if the guy isn't a total bit** He will absolutely LOVE IT
Im a guy and adore it!
Hope this helps, i give u props for that poem ^^Www@QuestionHome@Com
It's sweet!. Not a classic love poem!.!. but I guess that's not what you were going for!. It's more just like!.!. rhyming prose rather than a poem, I would say!. But it would be sweet in a Valentines card or something :)Www@QuestionHome@Com
It is heartwrenchingly beautiful!. No wasted words!. So hard to leave somone you are in love with because you know they are bad for your personal growth!.
WOW!
Write on winner!
T!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
reads like a 70's love song!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
two thumbs up,,,go for it girl!.!.!.!.well good luckWww@QuestionHome@Com