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Question: Couldnt sleep so i wrote a poem, is it ok!?
i couldnt sleep last night so i wrote this peom along with some others
Its bad when you don't know
but its worse if you don't care!.!.!.
Its bad when they lie
but its worse when they tell you the truth!.!.!.
Its bad when you cry
but its worse when your told to stop!.!.!.
Its bad when you tell them to leave
but its worse when they do!.!.!.
Its bad when they call you
but its worse when they don't!.!.!.
Its bad when you jump
but its worse your pushed!.!.!.
Its bad when your in love
but its much worse when you can't!.!.!.
ok now this was not brought on by anything, lol
i just thought bought it last night and expanded,
is it ok!?Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
interesting
i like it
amazing results when you can't sleep!Www@QuestionHome@Com
This is called an "antithesis" poem!.!.!.and it's not bad, but your spelling needs checking!.!.!."it's", not "its", "you're", not "your", and you dropped "when" from line 12!.
Looks like it was fun to write!.!.!.so keep writingWww@QuestionHome@Com
i like it
it kinda seems like a song i could sing too
haha
i think everything you said is very true thoughWww@QuestionHome@Com
It is a good beginning!. Playing with words is fun!. It is good for your developing good creative writing skills!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I love it!.!.!.but!.!.!.um!.!.!.!.all three places where you used the word "your" it should actually be the word "you're"Www@QuestionHome@Com
the contraction for you are is you're
bad grammar detracts from an otherwise interesting effortWww@QuestionHome@Com
yeha lol its pretty good you did u a ood job lol i dont think that it is badWww@QuestionHome@Com
It's good!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
oh my god that's so awesome!
good job,i wish mine were that good =pWww@QuestionHome@Com