The light of the night?

Question: The light of the night!?

Blinded by fear tempted by light
It would take just a cut off the knife
As I sit and wonder what it’s all for
Illusions of love leave me for more

One more day I will wait and see
Maybe she will come home to me
I don’t know her name and can’t see her face
Yet I sit and wait for her gentle embrace

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

Its a bit simple!. It is missing rawness from it, for something as dark at it seems the words seem to be put together to "pretty"

I think it needs a little more emotion

I like the length of it, short and to the pointWww@QuestionHome@Com

Lighten up Man
Plenty more bud bottles in the Landfill!.

One day more I'll wait and see
If she is coming home to me,
and if alone I have to stay
then down the pub I'll go to play

To play the field once again,
Jenny, Caprice, Anne and Jayne
And if I dont find love in this array
then I suppose I could turn Gay

Or find love on the internet
Bride from Ukraine I could get
Or Perhaps Chinese or Phillipine
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I'm not much into romantic poetry but i love it, for my self i replaced the girl to something i want which is myself at my best!.
i love that first line, blinded by fear tempted by light!. can i use that on my msn!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

I love itWww@QuestionHome@Com