Betsy (Be gentle, Im new at this)?

Question: Betsy (Be gentle, Im new at this)!?

Perhaps you've never met me
Hello my name is Betsy
An unheard voice of childhood
Because no one tried to save me

I might have been a writer
A doctor or a lawyer
I could have had a family
But no one ever let me

I dont know quite what happened
But mommy didnt want me
I got real cold and then i died
And no one even cried for me

My only day as Betsy
And no ones even there for me
A baby in an alleyway
How sad, the tale of BetsyWww@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

The first 8 lines work pretty well

The last 8 lines need work

Some of it is a little jumbled toward the end and doesnt flow as well

Its got promiseWww@QuestionHome@Com

Wow!. Great job!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

i like it!. your have amazing potential!. put more feeling in!. pour your heart into it!. :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

oh thats good!
The last four lines need work! tho!
I loved the rest!
keep up the good work!Www@QuestionHome@Com