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Question: How Does This Story Sound !?
Tell me if you would read it !.!.!.!.!.
Drew woke up his eyes were barely open , the only thing keeping him awake was the bright lights of 1970 cars blazing through the rain drops and condinsation of his scratched up window !. He saw his only friend , Jack which is a cockaroach he found under his bed !. Drew put on his silver jacket on and put Jack on his hand !. They went through the streets covered with spit out gum !. They went to the dock which was always wet because the waves were huge !. They carved their names on the wood that was not very soaked !. They will go here every day together !.!.!. Except today was going to be Drew's worst day of his life !. After they left the sad gray ocean they went under the dock to the tanned sand !. They saw the big waves with sea weed cans and other trash !. They went to the park which was just a street away !. They went there !. With the soaked grass they laid over a tree and just saw scratched up taxi's pass by !. They were falling asleep untill !.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
There are far too many errors!. It's hard to understand what exactly you're trying to convey!. I understand you were probably in a hurry, but take your time with these kinds of things!. It works out better in the long run!.
Umm!.!.!. This story really doesn't appeal to me!. I just don't know if I could get into a story about the adventures of a boy and his cockroach!. also, the "only friend being a cockroach" thing is a little too unreal for me!. Based on what I've read so far, it sounds like you aren't writing a fantasy or anything, so everything should be realistic, and this kind of stretches it for me!.
Keep working at it, though!. If you keep writing, you'll surely get better!. Who knows, maybe one day you'll be an author!. Just keep practicing!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
there is a need for you to improve your writing style!. grammar redundancies and inconsistencies are everywhere!.
keep writing!. practice makes perfect!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
just problems of writing style
no problem though
keep practising, rewrite!.!.!.
good luck!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
sorry!.!. but honestly, it's not!.!. too many errors!.!. good try though!.!. =pWww@QuestionHome@Com