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The last game

As I sit and wait my heart goes numb
I though she would call How could I be so dumb
As the hours pass I can only wonder why
How is she can be so cold why does she make me cry
It wasn’t meant to be I can hear them say
Tell it to my soul for again it must pay
Never again will I make this mistake
Blinded by love again my heart breaksWww@QuestionHome@Com

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The rhyming is sort of forced, I think you're capable of better words than 'dumb' and 'cry'!. I like the last two lines though!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I really liked it!.!.!.especially the end!.
Well written!.!.!.however consider a revise "the how could i be so dumb' slightly takes away from your poem!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

your poem tells a story and paints a picture!. I think the word dumb, if that's how you feel or felt then feel free to use it!. Good poem!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

your poem was so emotional and deep!. anbd it had a great ending!. i luv it!Www@QuestionHome@Com

rhyme is overratedWww@QuestionHome@Com

I think you sacrifice too much to work the rhyming patternWww@QuestionHome@Com