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Question: My last poem of the day, I swear (Ive been a little post happy I know)!?
She Shuffles around in her Corrective shoes
Searching around for a piece of good news!.
But cheer and charisma are not to be found;
Missus Persimmons is on the bad side of town

She gently tapped the shoulder
of a kind looking man
Holding a sign and an empty tin can
The Gin on his breath incited a frown
Its missus Persimmons on the bad side of town

How had she gotten to this horrid skid row
Her memories were dim, and she just didnt know,
But the rest of the story was told all around
of Missus Persimmons on the bad side of town

She was last seen in an alleyway
Spotting a businessman and trying to pay
For directions to some, more civilized ground
Its assumed she never left the bad side of townWww@QuestionHome@Com


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Ok dont listen to the person that asked if it was about a hooker or dogging the bad side of time!. Why would a hooker be wearing corrective shoes!? To me its about an elderly possible senile woman who had lost her way

I like it for the most part, I think the last 4 lines need some work though, they do not flow as wellWww@QuestionHome@Com

im not to sure i understand it !.!.!. but im gunna guess its about a young , troubled hooker !?!? !.!.!.
watevver its about i LOVE it great job !!

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why is "gin" capitalized and why are you so negative about the "bad side of town" !?Www@QuestionHome@Com

it was definitely interesting- made me want to keep reading

if the last stanza was a little more tragic, it would leave a greater imression

i like!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Very nice i like it a lot!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Good!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Ooh! I like it!. You should say how she liked it a while on "the bad side of town" but then tired of it(or something)!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

that is awesome! just don't quit your day job, and hope for fame after your long dead and gone!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like this poem!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!. :-)Www@QuestionHome@Com

I love it! When I first started reading it it reminded me of Ruth Buzzi on Saturday Night Live (the old ones)!. Very, very good!.

nfd?Www@QuestionHome@Com

u sound like ur in need of group therapy!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Oh I love it!Www@QuestionHome@Com