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Question: How is this now!? Why Daddy!?
You may not remember this but I had a few corrections to make!. Is it better!? Or can you tell!?

WHY DADDY

The little Dixie cup
She held so close to her
Like it was made of gold
That day was such a blur!.

Her hair was like spun gold
Her brother and sister were the same
The baby crying in the house
Now the fireman and policeman came!.

Oh Daddy, Daddy has a gun
No Daddy don't be mad today
Put down the gun and let's talk
Let's hear what you have to say!.

Mammaw and Pappaw are here
Don't hurt us Daddy please
Momma said you will not today
She said it was time to leave!.

OK we will go to our outside
But Daddy please go away
We don't want anything to go wrong
Don't make this day a bad day!.

Daddy why are you going outside with us
You don't want us here any more
No Daddy don't shoot us please
Our neighbor takes us to her door!.

We do love you Daddy, we do
Don't hurt anyone today please
Daddy I beg, and I beg you today
I beg you and I get on my knees

OH NO! OH NO what's that noise
Yes Daddy did have a gun
I'm crying so hard I am shaking inside
I guess my Daddy is all done!.

I am outside my neighbor's house now
They say it's all safe and sound
But why don't I feel that way
Who are these people all around!.

Papaw comes out with blood on his face
Oh no what an awful site
Did my Daddy do that to my own Pap Paw
I cried with all my might!.

No noise, no sound is baby alright
I am so very scared today
They send in a robot to check things out
Let's go get the baby, they say!.

A woman who I do not know at all
Runs into the house alone
Here she comes with my brother so tight
Out of our family home!.

But what's inside, please let me know
Is my Momma and Daddy OK
What about my dear Mammaw
This is an awfully bad day!.

All is now quite, almost sickening
The noise is not anymore
As the bullet proof clad policeman
Slowly opens the door!.

Take the children away please
Said the chief of police
We need to get out the bodies
And all the names released

OH I am so sick now
I have lost so much today
My Mammaw, my Momma, my Daddy
In a pool of blood they all lay!.

Daddy why did you do it!?
Why were you so mean!?
Daddy didn't you know we loved you!?
Now just look at this scene!

Daddy I have lost everything
All because of you
How will I ever go on like this
I hate you, I hate you, I do!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
ND~ Very poignant, but I think that it should be written in "stanza" form!.!.!.!.!.!.!.it's too long for verse poetry!.!.!.!.!.Just a suggestion!.!.!.!.!.It's beutifully done, but I'd be happy to "re-do" it with your permission and help!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.again, EXTREMELY poignant!.!.!.!.!.!.and timely!.!.!.!.!.!.YOU NEED TO PUBLISH THIS!!!

ChristopherWww@QuestionHome@Com

"site" should be "sight"!.!.!.

ps!.!.sounds like a JoDee Messina song!.!.!.
whether that's good or bad, that's up to you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

wow!. really good, but the word "daddy" makes me think of a dad raping her daughter so it freaks me out a little, but thats not youre fault!. haha!. really good!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Very good, love it as usual !!! You write great!. God bless you and your work!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

it's big and i am sure it'sn nice ,my english won't let me be able to read it ,but i am sure it's niceWww@QuestionHome@Com

Beautiful, and it happens more than we know!!!! too many drugs too much alcohol!! sometimes because of no work, please ya alll vote wisely!!!!!



God bless the nation
Mccain 09Www@QuestionHome@Com

A heart-rending story/poem!. It broke my heart the first time and has done so again!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I am touched,
but i feel scared

Why THE DADDY did it!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

Yes I do remember this !.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.It was quite good then as it is now !.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.It's a sad & horrible story that happens more then we know about

My question is WHY!?!? WHYdid he do it !?!?Www@QuestionHome@Com