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Question: Phoenix wrote a poem!. Is it acceptable!?
On the Martian Regolith
by Phoenix (aka Elaine P)
My designation is “Phoenix,” from a mythological creature,
An ornithic absurdity with one well-known feature:
I t periodically burns, then is reborn from the ash,
In Human colloquial speech, this is sheer balderdash!.
My shovel continually perforates the regolith,
A substance I shall not hesitate to explain forthwith:
It is the dusty top layer of Planet Mars’ soil,
Formed from the impact of meteoric toil!.
Mars’ tectonic plates, unlike Earth’s, never collide,
The atmosphere is composed of 95% carbon dioxide,
The temperature ranges from 68 degrees Fahrenheit
To negative 225 during the frigid Martian night!.
The colors of Mars take on quite different hues
From those of Earth, a planet often called blue,
At mid-day the sky colors range from reddish to pink,
But sunsets are bluish, at least that is what I think!.
I have learned to write poems from mathematician Euwaite,
I hope all who read this will think it is great!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I thought that I should never see,
A bird that wrote as good as me!.
But now I see that I was wrong,
The Phoenix sings a lovely song!.
So here I sit and wait anew,
To hear another song from you!.
I hope Ms Kilmer cannot see,
This silly poem wrote by me!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I know how difficult it is to write poetry, while hampered by the syllables of the facts you want to convey!. (My odes for departing staff would compel me to rhyme things like the Chief Engineer of the Dudley Southern ByPass - man, it was hard!.) You have managed it!.!.!.!.oops, sorry, I mean Phoenix has managed it!.
This is suspiciously like a genuine, properly constructed poem!.!.!.!.are you moving away from the light-side!?Www@QuestionHome@Com
it sounds like a book report put in poem form!. it's too fact-filled, too concrete!. poetry should be a little abstract, don't you think!?
unless it's for school!. if it's for school, awesome!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I do, indeed, think it is great!. A Mars poem with a whole new feel!. Is this inspired by the Data poem!? Very creative and a job well done!. I'm still trying to think one up!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
You've outdone yourself, yet again!. I like Mars colors of sky and sunsets!. Very imaginative, or is it technically correct!?Www@QuestionHome@Com
big poem
big planet
big math lol!
big everything!
i like the pink days and blue night part!.
and how you are digging in to a world
to seek!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Intriguing--I'd no idea Mars ever reached 68 degrees!. I am assuming that is 68 plus, not minus!.
Oh, the poetry is nice as well!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Indeed it is! Poor little Phoenix all alone on the cosmic beach with his shovel and pail!. A prodigy in a strange land!.!.!.as is the Author!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Another classic from you!Www@QuestionHome@Com
No fair!! Phoenix has a personal trainer!!
Great job!Www@QuestionHome@Com
Exquisite, This should have you first in line, on the first lift off!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I like it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I think It`s very Great!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
nice touch there, i give it a star!. good stuff keep it upWww@QuestionHome@Com