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Can you tell me what you think of this one now!.!.!.I'm trying to think of new ones daily but I'm getting writer's block!.

Pain in the Rain!.

From the moment I saw you
I knew you'd cause me pain!.

I knew from the moment
our lips locked in the rain

Whatever you had in mind
it just wasn't right for me
now you think I'm unkind

If I could rewind
beleive me it would be different
but oh well, it was fun
while it lasted until
you blasted me out of your life

Now you completly
ignore me!.
It doesn't matter anymore
because now you bore me

Silly fights were the
cause of our demise
I should have kept
my mouth closed

Now I am wise
it can't happen again!.
Oh well, it is too late
for you but I'll find
another that will be true

A tired cliche I know
but even if you go
my heart will bleed

It pleads for your
return at times when
I am low
and don't have anywhere else
to go

From the moment I saw you I knew
you'd cause me pain!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
so your telling me I suck!? well that's nice how thoughtful it's very good dont have to yell at me like thatWww@QuestionHome@Com

I like your poem because it has something to do with rain, it is just very pessimistic which is something that I don't like!. This can actually be 3 poems if you stop at !.!.!." now you think I am unkind!." Them start with " If I could unwind and end with, Because now you bore me!."

The words used in each of the poem would be less, but somehow it is greater and more thought provoking!.

Thanks for sharingWww@QuestionHome@Com