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I normally do ryhming poetry but I occasionly free flow especially when in a position of being hurt by something!. I thought I would put it out there and see what people thought!.
"Forgotten"
A number
A blank
A space
A stranger
To you
My name
My face
DOESN”T REGISTER
A Shadow
A bug
An annoyance
Your face
It strays
My face
I guess
I DON’T MATTER
My place
The corner
Displaced
My feelings
It’s fuzzy
My face
My words
FALL LOUDER
Try harder
My lines
My expressions
My feelings
Forgotten
I guess
It’s easy
TO NOT REMEMBER
I let out
I emote
I scream
All inside
It’s hurting
My place
My trust
IS SHATTERED
I thought
Things changed
Again
I’m mistaken
Over thinking
My position
I will
ALWAYS BE FORGOTTENWww@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Yo thats hot!! no doubt about it
you got talent take that and use it!.!.take advantage of it!.!.
Me being a DJ !.!.i know what hot from not
and i was reading your poem and got the vive right away
got the feeling,i was abe to see what you were tryn to put out there!.!.and for rapper/lyricist thats hard to do sometimes but thats really good !.!.!.props to youWww@QuestionHome@Com
Whoa!.
Best poem I have read on Yahoo ! Answers, for a long time!.
It flowed so well, no words were misplaced and there was such a sence of emotion in your words!. This could easily be published!.
I do highly suggest sending it into the art house collection or the like, local newspaper!. That is, if you are not to private about it!.
Loved it, really!. exellent job!.
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Aimee!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I really liked the quick cadence of this poem!. Based on how you structured it, you may want to consider breaking the last line into three one word capitalized lines to punch them more!.
ALWAYS
BE
FORGOTTEN
very nice!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
thats really good!Www@QuestionHome@Com
that's a work of art right there!!
great job :)Www@QuestionHome@Com
Its really great!. I actually think it's one of the best poems I've ever read!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
i think its really good for a fast paced flow!.!.!.
know what i mean!?
i like it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com