Position:Home>Poetry> Is this what granny means about a Luc bat?

The only problem I see is that "profit" needs to move to the 6th syllable spot!. also, the last two lines are both 8 syllables!. The rest looks correct!.

Wait a minute!.!.!.What have you done!?

You have placed an internal rhyme within the 6 syllable line as well!. In the Luc Bat, the internal rhyme in only in the 8 syllable line, you have inadvertently taken it a step further!. You may have just created a brand new rhyme scheme!.

Here is your rhyme scheme and syllable count!. As you can see, the rhyme scheme is completely different from the Luc Bat and may even be original!.

6*****a
8*****a*b
6***b*c
8**c***d (error here)
6***d*e
8*****e*f
6***f*g
8*****g*h
6***h*i
8*****i*j
6***j*k
8*****k*l
6***l*m
8*****m*n
6***n*k
8*****k*o
6***o*p
8*****p*q
6***q*k
8*****k*i
8*****i*a



It's cool, but it's not a Luc Bat!.!.!.You may need to do some research and find out if this has ever been done before!. If this is a new form, you will have to give it a name!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

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Luc bat is just a template, it doesn't necessarily need to be misogynistic arrse dribble!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

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This is funny!. I've been trying to write another one, but it gives me a headache! Somehow, this form and I don't click!

I can't even READ these correctly!. Sptfyr is always right!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

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yeaWww@QuestionHome@Com

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Google luc bat to see the rhyme sequence required!. In additon to end rhyme, there is internal rhyme on the the eight beat lines!. That is what I missed when I did mine!.

Edit: This is from Sptfyr:

Here is the rhyme scheme if you are interested!.

6* * * * * a
8* * * * * a * b
6* * * * * b
8* * * * * b * c
6* * * * * c
8* * * * * c * d
6* * * * * d
8* * * * * d * a

You have the internal rhyme from line one to two but not the end rhyme of line two and three!. On the eight beat line, the sixth ending beat needs to rhyme with the end rhyme of the line above!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

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