A poem that I would appreciate if you read and rated?

Question: A poem that I would appreciate if you read and rated!?

SOME QUESTIONS TO CONSIDER

here are some questions to consider:
what if i grow old and bitter!?
what if i'm sick and require care!?
what if i die and no one's there!?

and what about what happens before!?
what if i'm an adult that's mean to the core!?
what if i never follow my dreams!?
what if the world is as cruel as it seems!?

what if i never find any love!?
what if there is no god above!?
what if i dont have a purpose!?
and what if this short life is wasted!?

as you might be able to tell, i am 13 and quite tired!. 1-10 ratings and why please!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

it's alright!.

but mate, this is probably one of the most horribly cliche` things that i have ever read; and this is NOT a compliment!.

it's good that you've taken good note of use of stanzas etc!. but you always have to be careful writing poems in which the start of every line is the same thing!. if the start of every line is the same thing, that the words after that have to be the thing that collaborates with the beginning to make an impact on the reader!.

to give a rating, i would say 4 out of ten, and it suprises me that such a young child of 13, you are so tired, twisted and bitter!. stop writing stupid depressing poems, and express yourself in another healthy way!.

take up a sport or something!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Good news and bad news:

Bad News :
Well, the rhymes were very clever up until the last two lines, which were disappointing as far as flow goes in comparison to the rest of the poem, although they had great meaning!.

Good News:
The rest of the lines were very cleverly rhymed and really flowed terrifically!. The questions were really to the point and very relevant!. The whole poem addressed issues that everyone deals with, and was executed really nicely!.

I give it a 9! Keep it up!
Best poem I've read online, actually!Www@QuestionHome@Com

What if we lived in a world with no hypothetical situations!?

Jk, lol!.

The poem was decent!. It maintained a good flow!. And the questions interconnected somewhat into constructing a bigger theme!.

I must say though, any moment that you spend believing your life is wasted is in fact, a waste!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I give this an 8!. This poem makes the mind of your readers think about each and every question you're asking here!. It also adds more to the mood of the poem because of the young age you are and at your age these are questions you may be wondering about!. I love it!. Keep up the good work!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

This is one of my favorite poems that I have read tonight, it is really good I am going to star you!. Your poems will evoke thought and may cause people to take actionWww@QuestionHome@Com

thats not bad for a 13yr old!. honestly it needs more development but your off to a good start!.!.!.at least you are beginning to ask questions!. keep writing and ull definitly get better! good luck!. for now i giv this poem a 6!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

i really like it!.

how do u like my poem!?
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WOW, thats even better than mine, and i'm 15!.!.!.!.OMG

YOU HAVE A NATURAL TALLENT!Www@QuestionHome@Com

i like it - about an 9!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

nice!.!.!.!. 9Www@QuestionHome@Com

yea 10Www@QuestionHome@Com

i really liked it i would give 20 u deserve itWww@QuestionHome@Com