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TRUTH AND LOVE
She is as creation's skin, forever changing and returning!.
Her life is touched by nature's agency,
risen upward in the peaceable moonlight!.
When we held time's inevitable end in our hands,
the world was conquered by our imaginations!.
So close your eyes and see more vividly;
beyond yourself and beyond me, where love precedes contact!.
That love reveals a beautiful truth,
as real as blue is to the unclouded sky;
as passionate as fiery comets streaking across the night!.
And mirroring nature herself, she was inextricable,
yet mostly inexplicable, for she was rare!.
Her soul was imperfectly beautiful,
a transcendence of love that I could not bare!.
And how does one find love when he meets it!?
How does one know the truth if he sees it!?
In you it is found; not in completeness, but in progression!.
It is a prelude to an undone story!. Let us finish together, my love!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
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Hi
That is the best love poem I've ever read!. You have great talent!. How lucky is your girl to have a guy like you!.
Love is such a beautiful gift and to portray in a love story like this is bliss!.
i like the fact that you stated in my metaphor!. as she ages gracefully you will still see her true beauty which is within!. no matter where you are close or miles apart or even if our love ones depart our love continues within our hearts and imagination!. mirroring nature itself i think you mean we are all structured similar E!.g head, two arms, two legs e!.t!.c but her beauty and personality is rare, unique and Devinne!.
And i hope you get to Finnish your love story and be together for eternity!.
thx for the lovely inspirational love poem!. everyone needs to give a little love!.
Well Done! : )Www@QuestionHome@Com
Ok, i'm not going to lie a good chunk of it was beyond my comprehension but what i did understand was VERY GOOD
I liked: Her soul was imperfectly beautiful, And how does one find love when he meets it!?
How does one know the truth if he sees it!?That love reveals a beautiful truth,
as real as blue is to the unclouded sky;
as passionate as fiery comets streaking across the night!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I LOVE it! I love how you used peaceable moonlight, beautiful truth, and conquered by our imanginations!. You write beuatiful poetry, if you put it in a book, I would buy it!. Keep showing the world your talent!Www@QuestionHome@Com
its pretty good!. im only 15 !. i dont understand it completley!. but from what i do understand its still pretty good!.!. it doesnt really matter what other people say about it though you wrote what you felt and it means something to you so what other people think doesnt matter =]Www@QuestionHome@Com
i think this is great poetry!.
the only thing i dont like too much is the last sentence, i feel like it should be re-phrased!. or connected to the sentence before it and rephrased!. other than that, truly magnificent!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
You should not look for the opinions of others when writing poetry (nice poem though)!. True satisfaction should come from within!. You are the author!.!.!.as long as you feel you have gotten your point across then do not worry about others!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
This poem is amazing! It's beautiful!.
Consider it a job well done, for that is a great piece of work you have there!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
i wish somebody would write me a poem like this!. it is amazing!. who ever it is for is very lucky!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
alrite not that good tho!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.not good metaphors and similesWww@QuestionHome@Com
Nice, good picture,Www@QuestionHome@Com
it is freakin amazing !Www@QuestionHome@Com
i love it!!!
its so sweet and loving!.!.!.!.im thinking you wrote this for someone special and im sure they'll love it!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com
Dude it sux!. Don't quit yer day job!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Very sweet, she's a lucky girl!Www@QuestionHome@Com
it's doo-dooWww@QuestionHome@Com
that is amazing, you have a giftWww@QuestionHome@Com
wow im speechless
very niceWww@QuestionHome@Com
its goodWww@QuestionHome@Com
toooooo damn long jkjk its good man!Www@QuestionHome@Com
i honestly really like it :]Www@QuestionHome@Com