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Question: What you doing Sunday!? Do you like my Sestina Poem!?
Sestina
A sestina (or sestine or sextain) is a highly structured poem consisting of six six-line stanzas followed by a tercet (called its envoy or tornada), for a total of thirty-nine lines!. The same set of six words ends the lines of each of the six-line stanzas, but in a different order each time;

Skipping stones on a summers day
Reading about those times gone by
Sticky hands a strawberry sundae
Not caring who we’re singing to
These are some things I love to do
When it’s me and my philia love

Your first performance which I loved
Opening presents on your birthday
Your wedding when you said “I do”
When you left home and said goodbye
There was only one and now there’s two
Now you, drive to church on Sunday

So, who is going to share my sundae
If, I can’t share with you my love!?
What about skipping those stones too!?
What happens on a summer’s day!?
How can the time now pass on by!?
What’s a father suppose to do!?

Some things even I can’t undo
I will ask pastor on Sunday
If he knows, how I could get by
Without my special girl, I love
Where shall I go to fill my day!?
I don’t know where I’m going to

I wonder if you feel it too!.
What is it, you feel we should do!?
Can we meet up for just one day!?
Why don’t you come over Sunday!?
And bring some wine and your new love
We could share about times gone by

No need for us to say good bye
I know you got a life now to
You need to spend time with your love
I know what we should go and do
How about a strawberry sundae!?
Let’s go and skip some stones today

Today is special for me too
Let’s buy sweets like we use to do
“One sundae for the girl I love”Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
This is a captivating poem about the evolution of a father's love for his daughter!. There is both the sweet and the bittersweet in the words!. I have always fantasized about having a father who loved me this much, so this struck a deep chord within my soul!. Both of you, skipping stones and eating sundaes, are the luckiest people in the world!. For this lovely poem, Thank you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

A nice read!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

NIce one, real sweet!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

This is a very good poem and I really like the content, but aren't they supposed to be the exact same end words in each stanza!? also, isn't the envoy supposed to contain all six words!.!.!.3 in the "middle" of the lines and 3 on the end!. This is all according to my sources!.
http://www!.elfwood!.com/farp/thewriting/2!.!.!.
http://rpo!.library!.utoronto!.ca/display_r!.!.!.

However, having said all this, no one ever said that you can't break the rules!. Besides, some sources are different ;) It's a lovely poem!.

EDIT: Oh, I just read that there are versions that are less strict and the six words only need to appear in the envoy at some point!. Sorry!.Www@QuestionHome@Com