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I just found a bunch of poetry I wrote years ago and was wondering what you would think of it!.
Unfortunately, they won't really fit here!. I can post one of them, but it is my least favorite and the only one that will fit here!. If you're interested in reading my poetry, send me an e-mail and I'll send you a couple more for you to judge!.
Thanks in advance!.
My thoughts boarded an emotional train wreck derailed in the tracks of love!. My brain refused to save them as through the debris they shoved!. The brain blamed the thoughts for boarding an accident waiting to happen!. The thoughts were shattered at how the brain turned all of a sudden!. While both of them stared blaming each other with no care and with no real bother, my heart lifted the train and cleared away the grim skies and the sorrow!. Both my thoughts and my brain boarded the train along with the heart, turned the train around, and as one departed again from the start!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
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I've read his others (friend of his)!.!.!. and they are definatly great!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Beautiful imagery and sense of the language you're employing
My only criticism might be your lack of a more enticing, varied, vocabulary!. Of course, if you continue to write and read, expanding your language, it will fall into place naturally!.
You might want to check out http://www!.writerscafe!.org/ if you'd like to have your work hosted for people to comment on!. I'm not sure if its the same community it used to be (quality of feedback-wise), but I think your work would be more suited there than on Yahoo Answers!. *grin*Www@QuestionHome@Com
Your heart drives your thoughts and your brain and the grimm skies and the sorrow are cleared away by the happiness in your heart!!!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
this ones ur least fav!.!? wow i wonder wut ur best one is b/c this one rocks!!<33Www@QuestionHome@Com
nice job!.!.!.!.!.u might have a future in poetryWww@QuestionHome@Com