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Question: Opinions please!. my poem!?
Sorry posted this once but only one reply!.!.!.


When waiting for that particular time
To look into your innocent blue eyes
Only for you I would save my smile
You would always look surprised

Knowing that you had a routine
Its was always the same time
The sentence you’d express to think you’re keen
Always had me wanting more

Your eyes and my naive eyes met
I fear I was exposed to you
Nothing I could hide anymore than you
In a way which no one knew


When the time you would always come
I found my self pondering about you
Thoughts through my mind where you’d be
Though the night made me feel blue


Still waiting for the special moment
You came into my view at that time
Seeing you everything stopped
The anxiety went I wanted you to be mine

Those innocent eyes where a lie
Showing me you life in front of my crushed heart
I knew this was time for goodbye
Even thought I was breaking inside

My heart will be locked for a while
Looking into your eyes wasn’t allowed
But for one last time wouldn’t hurt
Yet I will not mess with what you have vowedWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
thats really good and nice its well writen with ryhym and rhyme,i can feel it,it speaks wonders to me actually,when i make a vow i am true to my word i mean what i say,but when you listen to spoken words like that it reaches out as if it touches you deep inside,some where far away i can hear it now whispering to me teasing me,lol,i shant carry on,i might start writing again and that would be good getting creative keep myself occupied it gets lonely sometimes especially when you shut your self away,i must go now but i will give you a star,i am gonna bookmark it,peAce,Www@QuestionHome@Com

That was very!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.I can realt!.!.!.it was very beautiful!.!.!.never give up on what you are doing because you are good at it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It's beautiful xx Well done xWww@QuestionHome@Com

this is amazing!Www@QuestionHome@Com

you made me cry! Very GdWww@QuestionHome@Com