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Question: Any thoughts on my poem I just wrote it all criticism is welcome!?
Light is fading darkness is coming
Stars are showing street lamps are glowing
Walking around the corners winds are flowing
Seeing whats in darkness my knees are shaking
Afraid of death I am not
If it was meant to be and not waking
I am suddenly winded feeling like napping
My senses keep on going
My body stops and takes in the darkness
Look at the wall white graffiti
Seeing all the words written but all the words are spelled incorrectly
My heart moves foward telling me to go
I am scared I don't want toWww@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I like it!. It pretty much describes how I have felt in some very fearful situations!. You know that state of being caught inbetween and wanting to run but you can't and then just actually moving!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I love it!. Sounds like a Jam song!. ( I know it isn't, but good enough to have been one) Only word I don't like is 'napping' but not sure why!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
okay first five lines were pretty cool, hell i'd go so far as to say amazing
but the sixth, seventh and eighth just aren't as good of ones,
anywho, i liked it,Www@QuestionHome@Com
!.nice one!
its impressive!.!.keep up writing for some more figures of speeches in it!.!.;/Www@QuestionHome@Com