Can you give me some feedback?

Question: Can you give me some feedback!?

O' Welcome to the devil's park
Where the evil rest and the evil lark
O' welcome to the devil's park
Where the lake is red and the sky is dark

O' Welcome to the Devil's Lair
Where the beast himself creates despair
O' Welcome to the Devil's Lair
Where there is nothing but bones bare

O' Welcome to the Devil's realm
Where the evil always takes the helm
O'welcome to the Devil's realm
Where the darkness will OverwhelmWww@QuestionHome@Com

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G'day, I think that does sound better with trouble in place of welcome!. It's dark and ominous!Www@QuestionHome@Com

O' Trouble at the devil's park
Where the evil rest and the evil lark
O' Trouble at the devil's park
Where the lake is red and the sky is dark

O' Trouble at the Devil's Lair
Where the beast himself creates despair
O' Trouble at the Devil's Lair
Where there is nothing but bones bare

O' Trouble at the Devil's realm
Where the evil always takes the helm
O' Trouble at the Devil's realm
Where the darkness will OverwhelmWww@QuestionHome@Com

Last line in middle stanza doesn't sound right!. Add 'dry' before 'bones'!.
Like it very much!.
Reminds me of a creepy cemetary!. Every time you turn your eyes in one direction something moves in the corner of your eyes!. But when you try to look at it it's not there!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Its good but I also agree with changing "welcome" to "trouble"!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

interesting!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Thats good, but I'm not too sure what you're getting at!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

very good!.!.enjoyed :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

awesome i love itWww@QuestionHome@Com

thats a good poem
but what is it for!?Www@QuestionHome@Com