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Position:Home>Poetry> Please tell me what you think of this little poem?Question: Please tell me what you think of this little poem!? The Final Hour
Death's claws are closing by Soaring above mountins high A soothing wind hugged the night while moonlight kissed the oceans bright an eerie scent ,rains of blood thunder roared as lightning struck And in the still before the flood, Surrounded by the gore and muck The remnants of an ancient fight - The bones lie cold, a burning white The dancing wind leaves with a sigh At peace at last, I close my eyes!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: I found this poem interesting, in that I wanted to read it!. At first I thought it was about a dragon, or some kind large bird, undergoing a gruesome battle, who returns to its nest to finally rest at peace, but after I finished I wasn't to sure, or 100% positive if that's what you were going for!. Instead I rethought my interpation and decided that it was about a man, seeing: his final fate, and his surrondings that would bring him it!. I hadn't read the title as deeply as I should have!. Always a great a plot!. Can't be beat!. I give this poem a Fantastic 9!.0 The setting is just a tad bit too wide, but it's war-fueld, and it rocks!. Note: I may just be hyped up about this poem, because I've read some (even too much) provoking emo, and lipstick poetry today!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Very sensitive details, but no overall meaning and the rhymes seem forced!. Try doing a little more freestyle; you have very good imagery, but try to touch on senses other than optical!. You seem to open more questions than needed, so keep it simple and try to sum up the poem in a nutshell at the end!. Questions left are for novel-sequel writers, not poets!.Www@QuestionHome@Com I don't think you need the "And" in the eighth line!. Maybe, "caressed" instead of "hugged" (I liked the pair of lines that it was part of, though)!. & "Peacefullness begins, I close my eyes"!. It was a very good poem how it was!.!. just thought I'd make a few suggestions!.Www@QuestionHome@Com it is actually very very very good! the only critique i have is that the language used is very simple!.Www@QuestionHome@Com full of emotion and really goodWww@QuestionHome@Com i think it is very goodWww@QuestionHome@Com |