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"A New (Redwoods) Trail"

Back in this city
dreams of greener air
flood my breathing mind

from the crisp air bitten
to the crushed crumbs of laughter
where i saw your face standing tall as a piece of forest
overshadowing my view of height and depth

in the very heart of the moment
you told me the longer i waited
the less i'd find later

in the breaking concrete and gravel
that would turn my feet to dust
and slice my thoughts like wind

my own heart imprinted behind in the ground
along with the soles and heels you'd leave
to show me you were beside me
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romantic!. intriguing!. interesting!. exquisite!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Did you write this!?
because if you did it's really good
i write poems myself :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

it's very good!. i wish i was as good as youWww@QuestionHome@Com

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