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Question: Any comments or thoughts on the poem 'First Love'!? Please help me!!!?
First Love


I ne'er was struck before that hour
With love so sudden and so sweet,
Her face it bloomed like a sweet flower
And stole my heart away complete!.
My face turned pale as deadly pale!.
My legs refused to walk away,
And when she looked, what could I ail!?
My life and all seemed turned to clay!.

And then my blood rushed to my face
And took my eyesight quite away,
The trees and bushes round the place
Seemed midnight at noonday!.
I could not see a single thing,
Words from my eyes did start --
They spoke as chords do from the string,
And blood burnt round my heart!.

Are flowers the winter's choice!?
Is love's bed always snow!?
She seemed to hear my silent voice,
Not love's appeals to know!.
I never saw so sweet a face
As that I stood before!.
My heart has left its dwelling-place
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I think it is quite beautiful, with many lovely images!. The last stanza is especially poignant and delightful!. You have unquestionable talent!. Thank you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

…your words, your words--- like a song to a woman’s ear…very well written! (The girl in your poem!? She’s lucky---you really are in love!)

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There are bits of good writing in here!. Don't let the rhyming dictate your words!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

You have talent for rhyme and meter!. Do not let it trap you!. I would like to see more of your poetry!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Your poetry is very interesting!. I love this, but let's see some more!Www@QuestionHome@Com