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Question: Deleted on accident! please post some advice ( i already took some of your advice)!?
I figured it out just now
My ears are my mouth
But split in half and flipped inside out
And what you say
Goes in one way
Making tiny vibrations of the things you shout
Your secret is safe
Just in case
You don't want anyone to know what you're talking 'boutWww@QuestionHome@Com
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perfect! thats actually a lot better than the lines i was going to suggest you replace that other line with!. i don't think i need to tell you this is much better, and flows with improved cadence throughout!.
i like the end too, the ambiguity allows us to insert anything we wish into the stanza's formula, and whatever secret we have, and we all do, will apply!. well done!.
keep posting!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
why is 'bout not about!? but it's an ok poem in my point of view, i really life poems that have darkness and feeling of depressing in it!. But for other people your poem is greatWww@QuestionHome@Com
I like it! It's good, plus it's different from the accepted "love" poem which everybody seems to writing about nowadays!. Keep writing! Peace!Www@QuestionHome@Com
Awesome???Www@QuestionHome@Com
It sounds good to meWww@QuestionHome@Com
Very original!. I like this piece!. :)Www@QuestionHome@Com
cool! original and quirky!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
i love it!. its perfect!.Www@QuestionHome@Com