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Question: My poem, is it good!?
Is this good, what should i fix and what do you think is its message!?
Heavens Angel in Hell
I told you once and you took hold
Behold you don’t believe
I will keep sinking in this slime mold, thinking
How you don’t trust
I don’t lie, I have proof but raise the roof and kill truth,
Is what you did
Dragged through the mud, flowing with blood
I was ordered to be
Me at the end of the public opinion pole
I was ordered whipped, ‘till there was no skin
When I heal I will at arms appeal find you out,
When I heal there will be a scar but I forgiveWww@QuestionHome@Com
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I would mark it B+!. Most of the poems on this forum aren't even titled or have plot!. I think that you could work on making this less choppy and all over the place!. Give the poem more structure!. From Rosaline!. keep up the good work:)Www@QuestionHome@Com
sick
no meter
no rhyme
no senceWww@QuestionHome@Com
Vary dark, almost made me cry!. Good message, kind of depressing but good!. Work the rhyme scheme a little if you want to make it sound better, but great job!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com
That poem make me cry! :D It's one of the most beautiful poems I EVER READ IN MY LIFE! :D How do you create such a beautiful poetry!? =]Www@QuestionHome@Com
Poignant and deep!. I will need to think of it a while!. Thanks for sharing!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Wow!!!! That was a truly amazing piece of workWww@QuestionHome@Com