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Question: What Do You Think Of This Poem !? !? !?
It's meant for a really good friend who's probably going to move!. I was wondering if it sounded okay before I gave it to them!. also I'm 13 so it might be a bit off but just a general opinion:

You were the greatest friend, one of the best I’ve ever had!.
Seeing you go now leaves me feeling hollow and sad!.
Time seems to fly when you’re with the right kids!.
It was quick between us that time swiftly slid!.

Thinking back on what we did, good times fill up in my head!.
We’ve done so much stuff, but so much more was ahead!.
But now you’re leaving, and you’re moving away!.
So let’s make the most of your last Georgia days!.

New friends will be made, the older left behind!.
The newer at present, the rest in the back of your mind!.
I’ll be forgotten, in a few years time I’m sure!.
But I think your impression will much longer endure!.

I really do regret not being the friend you were!.
Things seemed to zoom by too fast causing my judgment to blur!.
But now that you’re leaving I can clearly see,
I was nowhere near as good a friend to you as you were to me!.

Friends let down friends, something I’m sure you knew!.
Thanks for being a friend to me, even though I let down you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Pretty good, watch out for where you turn the phrase around for the rhymes sake!. even though I let down you, is a good example!. Would you ever say that in real life!? If not, than that usually tells you it should be changed!. Very good for a draft though, keep going bac and editing itWww@QuestionHome@Com

I like it over all, its a good poem, I think the last line could use some work!.

Maybe remove "to me", "though", let down you" and add "even after I was shallow to you!.

Many ways to do it!. I always look at all my poems as pieces under construction regardless of how long ago I wrote them!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

thanks a great apologyWww@QuestionHome@Com