Rate this VAMPIRE poem please.?

Question: Rate this VAMPIRE poem please!.!?

I write your name with blood in this tub
I yearn to bite your neck filled with scarlet liquid
I want you to trust me
Just set down the spike
I'll never do it again
Please don't you know I love you
I can control myself it will never happen again
I promise
Just set down the spike
Just trust me tonight
I'll never hurt you I promise
I'll never do it againWww@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

Van Helsing almost seduced by a vampire!. That is what I invisioned!. Great imagery and imagination!Www@QuestionHome@Com

It has potential, I see where your going with this!. I think that it needs more work!. Try and find words that flow together better!. But most of all don't give up!.!.!. Keep on putting the pen to the paper and be all that you can be!. Take Care - JOJOWww@QuestionHome@Com

nice stuff!.
don't write this off, please keep it!. i liked it, but i think it should be longer!.!.!.!.delicious to read!.!.!.!.!.more adjectives!.!.!.!.!.!.great stuff!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Good luck with that!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I rate it 2 out of 5 emo kids!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It's creepy!. You should make it more subtle, less graphic!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

kind of scares me!. but goodWww@QuestionHome@Com

it sound like you read it somewhere!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!. and just copy & past it!.!.!.!.!.!.!.need more in to it!.!.!.!.!.!.I'm onest with u!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com