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Floating further into summer,
Trying to find what is yours,
A twitter of a bird, a flutter of wings,
Down through the trees an angel will sing,
Wish upon a cloud,
That pretty landscape was the one we vowed,
Would complement the skies,
The sepia skies, that wowed!.

Then through the forest dance some indecent things,
Scaring the children,
With their spider web wings!.
They caused the suicide of my mind,
With their haunted smiles,
The ones that corrupted, and
The ones that stretched on for miles!.

So this was for the final word,
The ballad, that chirped so eloquently like a bird,
The letter placed,
When the end was near,
Those undying stars were ours to fear!.

And the summer sonnet played in the backdrop,
It sung;

Oh, How I love the summer,
and all that it brings,
Asphyxiating the darkness,
Whisking it away on wings!.

I'm fourteen years old and I love language and I adore writing! I took a break from my story to write this poem niggling at the back of my mind!.

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