when you see
the stars
with shining eyes
when you see
the sun
that calls for
open eyes
will just you
greet the new day!?
just to write
a poem
without structure
just to write a poem
for all to read !?Www@QuestionHome@Com
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the stars with shining eyes when you see the sun that calls for open eyes will just you greet the new day!? just to write a poem without structure just to write a poem for all to read !?Www@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: The "blandness" of the last hides a deeper meaning!. I see the mediocrity displayed as well as the desire to pen and to pen something worthwhile!. Interesting!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Day And Night: During the day the sun rises displaying a reddish orange that is beautiful As the sun moves around depend on the time of year will depend on if the days are longer or not!. Night Sun goes to bed with also a beautiful sunset pinkish blue As the night progresses the moon would come out along with the stars that twinkle!.Www@QuestionHome@Com "For all to read!." The writer is the most important reader, to self, all other readers have a choice not to read, or read and fluff it off as is!. As for the rest I agree with Elaine!. Pen if you must, why not!?Www@QuestionHome@Com Truthfully, I don't like it!. I understand the broken flow, but I just don't like it!. "will just you" I strongly dislike this placing of words!. It seriously just doesn't sound right!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Not every poem is a complete success, but the need "just to write," is an urgent one!. You must keep doing so!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Turn each stanza into a single line and expand the poem more!.Www@QuestionHome@Com uh!.!.!.!. you lost me after greet the new day!? i dont understand why you wrote the first part lovely, and then the last so!.!.!.blandly!. sorryWww@QuestionHome@Com Random line breaks do not a poem make!.Www@QuestionHome@Com I didn't like it but then again what do I knowWww@QuestionHome@Com |