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Question: Ok, try that again, opinions (hurry, this got deleted in fifteen minutes last time, for some reason)!?
Returning
I am frightened,
Last leaf on the tree before winter
Wind furiously blowing
Clouds racing above my head, marking time
Air chilling, infecting the core
Hold on branch, on life, weakening, waning
Yearning to let go
To loose upon the winds
My essence
My cracked, frail being:
The wind blows
Through day
Through night
The wind blows,
I cling to what I’ve known
As snowflakes fall
And as I am captured by their beauty,
I release to the wind’s pull
And become
Like the snowflake, briefly in sky,
Once more a part of the Earth!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
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Super poem!. I especially like the first line, 'I am frightened' - very strong introduction!. Then the actual experience culminating into resolve and contentment perhaps!?Www@QuestionHome@Com
Very nice!.!.!.I can see that last leaf hanging on for dear life and fearing what the end may bring!. I lovely way to describe the last moments of life before becoming "Once more a part of the Earth" Great Imagery!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
You are definitely on top of your game with this!. Well done, my compliments!. Loved the use of a leaf as a metaphor for a person!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I can't believe how much drama and emotion you could produce in a poem about so ordinary and simple an occurrence of nature!. Impressive!Www@QuestionHome@Com
How could this have been deleted!? it is wonderful, capturing the essence and frailty of human life!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Wow!! I love it and i feel like i can relate to it somehow!. Its so beautiful!. Dont ever stop!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com
Like yelling, "Fire, Fire!." and there is none huh!
Your poem is beatiful and refreshing in all this heat and rain!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
The sure-fire way to get deleted again is to mention it in the question!.!.!.heheheWww@QuestionHome@Com
It is like several that I have had deleted, why!? I don't see anything wrong, thanks for sharing!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Oh!.!.!. that is so beautiful and expressive!.Www@QuestionHome@Com