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Question: A poem called "A SUNSET " will give a read !?
"A SUNSET"
as the sun
peeks under
it's daily groom
as stars begin
to shine
to twinkle______
through the shade
of grey-blue clouds
as the day birds rest
giving way
to the evening song
no sorrow
no sighs
no regret
this wonder
of life
just goes on
an on an on _____
without regret !?
gary bechter!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Typos first: Gloom or groom!? and on and on!.
Since you are writing this in a sparse style, there are other words as I read that could be deleted and to me not affect the flow!. I am sure you can pick them yourself!.
Overall, a nice reflective look at life, world and ourselves!. Nicely penned!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Sunset:
A sunset is a beautiful way
to end another day
I am currently looking at one
take a look now before its gone
until the next day!.
They don't last
so have a look fast
if the weather calls for it
tomorrow it will again start
only on a sunriseWww@QuestionHome@Com
nice poem ^_^Www@QuestionHome@Com
I love it! What a good poem!Www@QuestionHome@Com