As wild as a bear
am I!.
Selfish and cold
with desire!.
River currents
contain my soul
through others!.
Disarmingly
cuddly
but truly
hungrily
mad!.
Solitude
and left alone!.
Do not disturb
as wild as a bear
am I!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
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am I!. Selfish and cold with desire!. River currents contain my soul through others!. Disarmingly cuddly but truly hungrily mad!. Solitude and left alone!. Do not disturb as wild as a bear am I!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: I liked it!. good, but not great by any means : ) I particularly liked the absence of key punctuation!.!.!.gives it some personality!.Www@QuestionHome@Com I think it is quite good!. I like how it begins and ends almost the same!. But the line "As wild as a bear am I", does make me think of the way Yoda from Star Wars speaks!. :)Www@QuestionHome@Com It's honest, and a bit spooky in it's personality which is good because it's strong!.!.!.!. Great metaphors!. Great job :)Www@QuestionHome@Com |