The sun slowly rises
only to fade away
then goes into the night
with a cool midnight spray
we sleep sound in our beds
with troubles far away
only to be awakened
with the begining of a new day!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
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only to fade away then goes into the night with a cool midnight spray we sleep sound in our beds with troubles far away only to be awakened with the begining of a new day!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Beautiful! I like that!.Www@QuestionHome@Com It's a really good poem, but the last line has a few too many syllables in it!. Try: 'with the start of a new day'!. Hope I didn't offend, it really is good!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com Beautiful Nikki!.Www@QuestionHome@Com sounds good!. make sure it all has good ryhming tho let it roll!.!.!.!. keep it all up<3 Jay^_^Www@QuestionHome@Com deepWww@QuestionHome@Com I like it, its got a good flow to it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com |