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The full moon creeps to touch my window ledge
but a million stars shine brightly tonight
the silver moon shimmers a nighttime so bright!.
The moon and the stars are hidden away
day light dawns the sun in the distance
not gone forever but blinded by persistence!.
Thanks Y!A
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I like the idea and the way you wrote those 2 paragraphs, but add more to it, perhaps a more detailed description of day and night!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Try changing the word "but"( it sounds negative and hesitant) to something else like the word "and"!. Good luck!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
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