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Question: How do you like this poem!. Be Honest!!?
My Getaway
A place where you can go and just breathe
Where all the stress and pressure can leave
You can clear your mind and not have to think
Recline in couch and let yourself sink
Into a world where you have no worry
That you can do what you want and not be in a hurry
Out goes the responsibilities that you must do
In this world everyone may start anew
Here you may do whatever you please
It’s like a new beginning, far overseas
Unfortunately, not everything lasts too long
As hard as you try to have it prolonged
But don’t too much, for there will be a day
When, once again, your mind can wander astray
And here again you shall be in this peaceful placeWww@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
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usually the poetry up here is cr@p
But I liked thisWww@QuestionHome@Com
It's alright!. Recline in couch!.!.!.I think that you should put an "a"
there!. And the last line to me seems a bit thrown in there!. =/ Like you wanted to hurry up and finish!. I think that you should either restate something or get a better ending than that!. And you should make a pattern with the stanzas better!. You have 2, 4, 4, 2, 2, 1!. It doesn't seem as if you worked on trying to make a pattern here!. And line thirteen, but don't what too much!? Don't try too much!? =/
My opinion!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I been there!. It`s called "My Bed"!. That`s why I love to sleep bye bye problems and hello sweet dreams!Www@QuestionHome@Com
i liked it up the end,the end line seemed to just stop short!.Www@QuestionHome@Com