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Question: My love poem!?
something u should know- I'ma girl on my brother's account!. here's another poem, a love poem this time!.
HI-FIVE
I am not going to hi-five you anymore!.
You are one of those people
that holds one's hand
after a hi-five!.
And so,
you hold my hand!.
I feel my small, soft hand
encased safely in you rough, large, gentle one,
and I am struck by lightening
and fireworks explode
and my heart pumps molten love through my quaking body!.
And then,
you let go!.
And I fall
one hundred
one thousand
one million miles
into a loveless, arctic pool below!.
So,
no more let downs!.
No more hi-fives
until you need to hold on
as much as I do!.
Ok now let me have it!Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I really liked the end but in the middle I got a little lost in the metaphors and found it a little hard to understand,Www@QuestionHome@Com
that is a really good poem!. I think you should,,, no!.!.!.!. i KNOW you should write more!.!.!.!. u r talented as you can see!.!.!. keep going!Www@QuestionHome@Com
I really like all the natural elements and the volcano reference!.
It's pretty cool!Www@QuestionHome@Com
pretty cool ;pWww@QuestionHome@Com
This is great! Another great poem!Www@QuestionHome@Com
EXTRAORDINARY WELL DONE MY LAD!Www@QuestionHome@Com
Needs work
Good LuckWww@QuestionHome@Com
good poemWww@QuestionHome@Com