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Proud heritage, long lineage, Fast Horse gaits Appaloosa, Arizona, many miles away Distance vanishes as the sun wakes the day Poetry and lyrics, written words exchanged Time, destination, decided and arranged Anticipation and apprehension shared by two Rapidly replaced by their hearts renewedWww@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Stunning imagery, the distance vanishing at dawn is marvelous!. This is really a poem in two parts!. First, the voyage of Fast Horse and second, the background, where the two people exchanged letters and poetry and arranged the meeting!. Two people who find new life together!. I love this poem!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Ah, you've taken the Native American and paired him with the wonders of the written word and a white woman lover!. I love this story in poem form!!!! The only things I missed was the White Buffalo, Raven, Coyote, Bear, and Wolf!.!.!.!.!.then again, two keep each other company!.!.!.what need have they for legends!?Www@QuestionHome@Com This is very beautifully written and a wonderful story!. The sense of urgency and expectation are palpable before the lovers unite in the final line!. "Distance vanishes as the sun wakes the day" is a lovely line!. I love this!. Thank you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com And I was looking for something slower! lol Well done!. The only suggestion would be try removing the "the" before sun on line 4!. It seemed to read better for me, but that may be me!. This is a keeper!. Congrats!.Www@QuestionHome@Com There was a feel of excitement and anticipation of your poem!. A story with episodes that could follow!? May I ask when we all can have the pleasure of reading the next one!? Good job, well done!!Www@QuestionHome@Com It is perfect; I wouldn't change a single word!. Anticipation builds as the pace of the poem increases!. Beautiful!Www@QuestionHome@Com Nicely written poem!. Good job!.Www@QuestionHome@Com You know I like Indian poetry!. Thank you for sharing!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Beautifully done!. Makes me want to sit a horse and ride to my own love!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Poem!.!.!.!.!. O God !.!.save poor kids!.Www@QuestionHome@Com |