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Question: I have another poem I would like feedback on please!?
Its called him, its not about me, it just kinda came to me while I was at work and bored!. Does it mean I have a sick head!?

Him
He comes home
in the middle of the night
alchol on his breath
not feeling alright

she asks about his day
and he starts to yell
she never wanted it like this
she is living in hell

not too long ago
things weren't bad
she was becoming happy
no longer sad

she had found the man
she never had
but everynight
he came home mad

the fighting began
pretty early in the game
she brushed it off
and took all the blame

she hides the bruise
he left on her face
thinks to herself
that she's such a disgrace

friends and family
hadn't had a clue
those once brown eyes
have now turned to blue

a little more time
she says in her mind
thats all he needs
and then he'll be kind

time passed by
slowly it seemed
nothing better
the way that she dreamed

finally one day
seeing nothing was better
he came home from work
and he found a letter

the letter simply said
only one word, goodbye
then he sat there
and wondered why

he went to their room
and there she laid
covered in blood
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Take it from an old Poet,your Poem has Merit! No way you have a sick head! Although when I read it,I must admit I thought you were writing about your-self! You have great Talent! Now young Person,go forth and write a Poem of Love!Www@QuestionHome@Com

No it doesn't mean you have a sick mind, it means you have an imagination!. I make up random stories when I'm bored too (however not these kinds)!.

I like this and how the poem is used to tell the story!. the rhymes makes perfect sense and gives a flow to it!. I really liked the beginning

I must say the ending was unexpected!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

awesome, you did a great job, no you are just creative, most of my poems are things that just come to me too!. very good, keep up the fantastic workWww@QuestionHome@Com

Noooo, She killed herself! I thought she was leaving him at first But I like it though awesome poem!!Www@QuestionHome@Com