Wrote it last night, can i have your opinion?

Question: Wrote it last night, can i have your opinion!?

What do you do when you are lost
lost between truth and lies
how can someone be so vindictive
why cant you just understand me
i dont want to believe you
i want to believe you dont want me to
we've tried to understand, solve to puzzle
but the peices dont seem to fit

who can you love when all love has died
buried with faith and trust
how do you know when love is real
that it even existed to begin with
is love worth it all, the pain
if love can die, is it possible to kill it!?

when does love begin
does it start with a feeling, emotion, a sense of wellbeing
can a single kiss bring life to love
why is love so simple to be cultivated
yet so diffifcult to be liberated

!.!.!.at some point be true to yourself, look at it and ask
are you worth my love!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

It has great promise!. I really liked all the ways you framed love!. You have great comparisons, metaphors, descriptions, etc!. I have a little constructive criticism, though (please don't hate me)!. You need some punctuation and capitalization!. I think it is a very emotional poem that unlocks feelings in even the most stoical!. I have an idea for a title: Middle Ground (kinda weird, I know, but it's supposed to be because you are stuck between truth and lies)!. If you hate it, that's fine!. I shouldn't tell you what to name your own poem anyway!.

Oh, and by the way, if people try to take your poem down, that may be because it is free verse!. People seem don't get that style of poetry (I would know!)!. I think free verse holds the most emotion though, because you aren't focused on rhythm, counting syllables, structure, rhyming, or that other crap!. All in all, good job! Keep it up!

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As much as I'd like to say that it's just "not my kind of poetry"!.!.!.I feel that I have to be honest and tell you that it's not very good!. It's cliched, the rhythm is way off, and it reads like an email separated into stanzas!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Poems don't have to rhyme! This is really good!. You can feel your emotion just by reading it!. love it!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

it's awesome!!

if it's suppose to be a poem, it doesn't really rhyme
unless it's a free style type

either way u did an amazing job! =]Www@QuestionHome@Com

I don't usually like these over emotional poems!.!.!.

but this one got my attention, once i started reading, I couldn't stop!.!.!.

good jobWww@QuestionHome@Com

You sound really bitterWww@QuestionHome@Com

I think this would make an awesome greeting card!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I think you should study poetry for a while!. You'll write better stuff afterwards!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

beautifully deep!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

this is really good actually !.
i liked alot!. there was alot of feeling behind it
so good job:DWww@QuestionHome@Com

That is amazing :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

its good meaningfulWww@QuestionHome@Com

favorite line: "when does love begin!?"Www@QuestionHome@Com

Its really good!!! :) good jobWww@QuestionHome@Com

Its free-verse, and its excellent!.

Good luck!:PWww@QuestionHome@Com

it doesnt rhyme!.!.!.!.but it is good!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

wow that is really good! you did an amazing job!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

i like it - seems deepWww@QuestionHome@Com

its pretty good, i would say about 7/10Www@QuestionHome@Com

goodWww@QuestionHome@Com

job well done!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.like it lotzWww@QuestionHome@Com

But what would you do with our opinion, really!?
It doesn't matter, like anything else - but your feelings!.
Write them down whenever you can!. It is very well that you can do it!.
Then, for the poetry sake, spend another time about your poem!. There is no rhyming needed, maybe - just maybe - no much rhythm, but some of the remaining should be a little more chiseled one!. You'll get new ideas, rearranging, etc!.
When you'll get as well some rhythm your poems shall be perfect!.
Don't stop, just write them down - for yourself - whatever you're feeling is, lay it on paper!. And read them again in a short while!.
This is a start which many others are loosing it on the long side of the road of writing!.Www@QuestionHome@Com