`` POETRY - lend an ear ?

Question: `` POETRY - lend an ear !?

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http://www!.freewebs!.com/ourcigarettes/to!.!.!.

Feel free to have a look at the rest of the site - I made it myself!. I would love some con-crit and comments about this purticular poem!.

It's not amazing - and poetry is not my forte so please don't be tooo harsh!. I am only sixteen and kinda fail at the whole creativity thing xD

So yeah!.

Thanks

Aimee!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

it's very deep, & not what
you would expect from an
average sixteen year old!.
kudos! :) the way that the
next major line always
started with 'we' had
connected the poem
together, but a little more
flow would improve the
poem!. keep on continuing
your writing! I'll for sure
keep on looking out
for new poems of
yours :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

HELLO
I DON'T KNOW WHAT YOU ARE TALKING ABOUT NON CREATIVE!
THAT WAS A REALLY GOOD POEM!.
BUT I NEED TO TELL YOU
WYLIE ON LINE 7 SPELT WRONG!. IT IS SPELLED WYLIE!.
PINNOCIO IN PARAGRAPH 5 IS SPELLED WRONG!.
AUG IN THE LAST PARAGRAPH NEEDS TO BE CAPITALIZED!.

OTHERWISE IT IS GREAT!
NO KIDDING!
HELLODOLLYWww@QuestionHome@Com

wow, i love it!
it's so powerful and the it really touches you!.
it's tsrong and gives you a feeling or mood!.
plus, your vocabulary is great!.
keep up the great work ! :)
hope to see more poems coming up :)
awsome and creative, especially from someone that's 16!Www@QuestionHome@Com