Do you like my song/poem? I call it "From The Inside"?

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Question:

You think you are all so perfect,
Wipe off the stains with your guilty concept,
I get up everyday hating to be alive,
Kicked out of the society, I am just breathing and not alive!.

I know I got some imperfections,
But how can you collect them up and throw them in my face,
Life is not about how good you look, how cool you are or how much of friends you got!. Life is not a race,

Your self infected misconceptions,
Will kill what you have created by your false corrections,
One big actor is what you are
But I can see inside you!. I can see who you really are,
Inside you are ugly!.!.!.!.!. ugly like me!.

This is the last straw,
I cant take it anymore,
Kiss yourself good bye,
Because I Am gonna sing you your last lullaby!.

By:
ANTI CHRIST

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

Beautiful
The words are chosen carefully
you are writing this out thoughfully
Everyone has minor imperfections
especially the person who hurt you

A person with minor imperfections
don't have to treat others badly
they have to make the best of a bad situation!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

That last paragraph threw me off, big time!. I think it should be erased, or put into a different work!.

Get rid of ,"I'm just" in stanza 4!.

With thrid paragraph I give this a
5!.2/10
With out it,
7!.8/10

I like this poem because it speak the truth, that not to many people like to hear!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

i think itde make a nice songWww@QuestionHome@Com

This was really fantastic with all your raw emotions and feelings' and it totally rocks!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

amazing :) love it
except the third paragraph but
its still really good :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

a 4!.!.!.
I think you need to look into anger management or at least need a good hug and some warm milk and cookies!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

i like it !.!.!.im not good on rating but i give it a seven and a halfWww@QuestionHome@Com

that was good! 10/10Www@QuestionHome@Com