Last poem of the night. Wrote this while on the phone. Is it worth persuing.?

Question: Last poem of the night!. Wrote this while on the phone!. Is it worth persuing!.!?

"underground"

Sitting lost in contemplation,
Never coming back!.
Devoid of all obligations
Black as a funeral hearse!.
Can't pull anymore Houdinis'
Summers' over, Winter is nigh!.
Day is over, night has sprung
Thinking straight much too hard!.
Too old for any fears!.
Buried alive!.!.!.it's too late
Time has come to hide
My era has come to an end!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

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I like it!. It's!.!.!.!. well, sad!. To say that your time has come to an end, it's just really sad!. Yours won't be over for a long time though!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like it!. I think it serves as a great foundation!. I would suggest playing with the order of the words!. Perhaps you could say:

Too aged for these fears
I'm buried alive in here (or maybe I'm bured alive under here)

Or something like that!. I think you've got something regardless; bravo!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Well if it is worth pursuing!.!.!.you need to pursue it there Steve! I'm ready to pursue some chicken myself!. Thanks for sharing!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Like the beginning, don't know what Houdinis are or is, like the next two lines really well!. It is worth pursuing! (My last answer for the night)Www@QuestionHome@Com

If you change the way you stated a few things, it would be excellent!.!.!.like all of your other poems, this one is very deep!. :) Definitely worth pursuing!Www@QuestionHome@Com

i like it!. thats how i feel some times and i'm not even 15 yet!. lol!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

i like itWww@QuestionHome@Com