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Position:Home>Poetry> Do you like my poem, its called the dark.?Question: Do you like my poem, its called the dark!.!? I feel the dark from dusk to dawn
My home is in the dark The dead of night My demon light!. The moon my god above I move with stealth My night is yours My spirit moves Thought open doors A bat,a cat My pets at play Until the light of dayWww@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: interesting, quite good!.Www@QuestionHome@Com I agree, i liked the beginning, but the last stanza is a bit childish!. I liked the "The moon my god above"!. When i read "i move with stealth" i remembered Halo, i don't know why!.!.!.!. but other than the last stanza it was good, mystifying!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com I liked the 2nd and 3rd verses not too sure about the rest of it!. You may want to follow the link below for some simple assistance!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Good poetry!. This is quite good but does need some fleshing out!. You should spend more time on each poem instead of trying to push out a whole lot of them!. Keep at it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com It's really good it's just the last stanza needs some work it needs to be fleshed out moreWww@QuestionHome@Com Pretty cool but the last verse dosent seem to fit!.Www@QuestionHome@Com I liked it 'til the last bit, it turned it into a child's poem!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Yes but it starts really well then drifts off towards the end, I think you got fed up lolWww@QuestionHome@Com Sorry I dont like it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Meh, Its Was Alright!. :PWww@QuestionHome@Com No, I don't like it, and if you grow up neither will you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com |