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Question: Please give me feedback on my poem!.!.!.!?
When I was young I trapped an ant in a circle of hot glue!.
He twitched and jerked in pain!. You do not deserve this!.
When I was young I fried a beetle with a magnifying glass!.
He screamed and screeched in pain!. You do not deserve this!.
When I was young I cut a worm and watched him burn in the sun!.
He wept and wriggled in pain!. You do not deserve this!.
When I was young I ripped one wing off a fly to make him spin!.
He begged for mercy and cried in pain!. You do not deserve this!.
When I was young I crushed a snail's shell to let him out!.
He shrieked and slouched in pain!. You do not deserve this!.
When I was young I was a malevolent dictator!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
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ME LIKELY LIKELY! :DWww@QuestionHome@Com
I'm opposite
i always helped the ant of the window to the grass
or let the fly outside
so I'm a malevolent what!? lol
well i didn't have fun reading this it made me squirm!
whats with the "you do not deserve this!?
who's saying that!?
your not really dictating anything
just torturing a poor ant !Www@QuestionHome@Com
I really like it!. It's very creative and unique and doesn't conform like other poetry does!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
i like it !
very creative and unique !.
i had fun reading it ^_^Www@QuestionHome@Com
lol its alrightWww@QuestionHome@Com