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Question: What do you think about my poem, any suggestions!?
I always wondered
What that feeling was
When I left
It felt as if I left a part of me behind
Like it stayed with you
Until we reunited, then it came back
But more came with it
Happiness and comforted came with it
What an amazing and wonderful feeling
When two people find one another
And they see things straight on
Eye to eye
Face to face
But nothing is more soul-saddling and heartbreaking
When they are apart
But the world rejoices in their touch
Love what a funny, amazing and beautiful
Thing it is
I know I proably have some miss spelled words!. But is there anything else, besides that!? And suggestions!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I think you mean comfort and saddening which help to make it read better!.
You might like to try putting lines 15 and 16 earlier perhaps after the 5th line!?
You will have to change one or two words (like but to and perhaps) and see if you can tell the story from sadness to happiness!.
Of course you may prefer it as it is, but it is a very thoughtful poem!.
I liked it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I think it is really good!. You showed a lot of feeling!. But, make a little more ryhme words to make it sound better!. Believe me, I am an expert at writing!Www@QuestionHome@Com
Don't worry about suggestions be it praise or criticism, just keep on being original like that and you'll be untouchable!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I think it's really good, you explain the emotions really well, in my opinion :)Www@QuestionHome@Com
it's cute, maybe take out "with it" in line 8!. You can add some comma's to have a pause effect :O i love itWww@QuestionHome@Com
its amazing i ussually dont like poetry but i like this poem :DWww@QuestionHome@Com
beautifulWww@QuestionHome@Com
This is reallyyy good!. =)Www@QuestionHome@Com
hmm it could use sum work mayb a bit of rhyminWww@QuestionHome@Com
Very good!. I don't see anything wrong with it!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com