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Question: I was 13 when I wrote this poem!. Read and comment please!!?
I'm 16 now but I was rereading my diary!.

A seducing drug,
a powerful obsession,
Tempting my mind,
Just beyond my reach!.
But our gazes lock!.
TIme freezes and shatters,
That one miraculous moment,
Like flying off a cliff,
When I become high and exhilarated,
And almost lose control!.
But I regain composure,
Afraid to make mistakes,
So I look away,
Trying to deny
A severe disappointment,
That he didn't want me,
That I was worthless!.
But I would always tell myself
That next time,
Maybe, just once,
He'll come over,
And greet me,
But deep down,
I knew we just weren't meant to be!.

What do you think!? I remember when I used to be obsessed with certain guys for weeks at a time!. It was pretty unhealthy, but really fun!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Awesome!. (thumbs-up) It's unbelievable how people are so good at writing poems(:Www@QuestionHome@Com

you write a lot like myself!.!.!.
your style of writing is called new age poetry!.!.!.you aught to consider publishing your work!.!.!.very good!Www@QuestionHome@Com

That sounds like the stuff I write in my diary! Overall, it's pretty good!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

wow, thats good!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

ya i think all of us go threw that at sum point or another good poemWww@QuestionHome@Com